
A clear idea. Room to develop it.
“Shakespeare presents Macbeth as ambitious. He calls his desire ‘vaulting ambition’. This shows that he wants power and will do anything to become king.”
The student has chosen relevant evidence. The next step is to explain what its language reveals.
Feedback that shows where to go.
Keep: the clear argument about ambition.
Develop: what “vaulting” suggests.
Refine: the sweeping claim “will do anything”.
“Explain the image of a leap. What happens when ambition ‘o’erleaps’ and ‘falls’?”
Now the word supports the argument.
“‘Vaulting’ presents ambition as an attempt to leap upwards. The movement from ‘o’erleaps’ to ‘falls’ suggests that Macbeth’s desire to rise could cause his collapse. He recognises the danger, yet chooses to pursue power.”
Then: practise explaining a significant word in a fresh passage. The teacher checks whether the student can use the skill independently.